tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post6624060797571408608..comments2023-03-25T07:04:14.167-06:00Comments on Abby Annis: Breaking the Rules BlogfestAbby Annishttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05543937393055900844noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-43358387700487083252010-06-21T12:54:47.186-06:002010-06-21T12:54:47.186-06:00This is funny to me because I've seen it a cou...This is funny to me because I've seen it a couple of times now. The book, Beautiful Creatures, does it really well--and the MC brings the evidence of his dream out of his dream with him. Beautiful Creatures doesn't open like this--but it's on the second or third page--so it's close. <br /><br />My original opening to my book was like this as well. A dream--and in the end she saw a giant flash of light. She wakes up still blinking the spots away and with the scrapes that she got on her legs from running in the woods. <br /><br />Then I have a friend who uses this plot device as well. Again, not as an opening, but the whole, "bringing something back from the dream thing." <br /><br />I think it's intriguing though. It's such a neat idea that a dream can contain some part of real life! I thought it was well written too--although I felt a little sorry for the mom cause the girl was being a bit whiny. I have teenage daughters, so maybe that's why I related to the mom more than the kid. lol. <br /><br />Anyway, I'm writing to let you know that I gave you an award on my site. <br /><br />I've been following you for months and have always been entertained so I figured you definitely deserve one!:)<br /><br />To pick it up just come to www.chimeracritiques.com and click on the blog link. See you there! Have a happy Monday. :)Callie Foresterhttp://www.chimeracritiques.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-661814132112766342010-06-18T23:46:31.855-06:002010-06-18T23:46:31.855-06:00psh. Dialogue can work, in my opinion. Break the r...psh. Dialogue can work, in my opinion. Break the rules when you want! lol. I do like this even if it starts with a dream. But I'm a big fan of dreams, though I don't write about them. I get my ideas from dreams so they are awesome. Great entry.Dawn Embershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00214560861614476799noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-88249061358659304162010-06-18T23:39:56.952-06:002010-06-18T23:39:56.952-06:00No starting with dreams! Banned from the blogfest!...No starting with dreams! Banned from the blogfest!<br />Just kidding. ;)<br /><br />Okay, why not dreams? Because it's cliché. Also no looking in mirrors. There are a few other no-no starts like expository prologues.<br /><br />Anyways, nice writing despite that!Andrew Rosenberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09215333688753781447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-31082799086626448392010-06-18T22:51:03.807-06:002010-06-18T22:51:03.807-06:00I was disappointed when the dream turned out to be...I was disappointed when the dream turned out to be a dream, but when she had blood on her hands, that was quite intriguing.Angiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01445455787485222068noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-59323233989013097302010-06-18T18:41:04.731-06:002010-06-18T18:41:04.731-06:00What rule about "not starting with dialogue? ...What rule about "not starting with dialogue? Why didn't anyone tell me : O<br /><br />I actually like it quite a bit. I can really identify with not wanting to get up in the morning : PPlamena Schmidthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14222695582552877560noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-4191898338136263212010-06-18T17:53:50.561-06:002010-06-18T17:53:50.561-06:00Good opening! I think it was well done! I really...Good opening! I think it was well done! I really wanted to read on!Tyffani Clarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12995378511468929618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-6309509760411312892010-06-18T15:16:47.278-06:002010-06-18T15:16:47.278-06:00Yeah, it's cool. I want to know about the mark...Yeah, it's cool. I want to know about the marks she seemed to wipe away. You'd probably want to change her age to 16 if it's YA, but it worked. Good stuff!RaShelle Workmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582252557500502186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-81502132764946301292010-06-18T14:25:48.860-06:002010-06-18T14:25:48.860-06:00Like the others said, rules are made to be broken....Like the others said, rules are made to be broken. Sure, you can edit some of the 'mistakes' out, but the scene works well as is! <br /><br />Well done!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-82822318309822709072010-06-18T13:57:32.454-06:002010-06-18T13:57:32.454-06:00Hi Abby! Sorry I'm slow going today, my hubby ...Hi Abby! Sorry I'm slow going today, my hubby gave me the golden opportunity to take the entire morning and afternoon from my kidlets so that I can edit! That's where I've been.<br /><br />Wow, I love this piece. So very well written it makes me wonder why those rules were invented? Too cliche, maybe? *Sigh*<br /><br />Thank you for participating! ((Hugs)) :)Elizabeth Muellerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06028099814857743134noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-40355669928317101022010-06-18T10:23:08.650-06:002010-06-18T10:23:08.650-06:00I think it was well written too.I think it was well written too.E. Arroyohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06634213563563094173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-17809711492048005672010-06-18T10:10:46.573-06:002010-06-18T10:10:46.573-06:00I remember this, mostly, anyway! And I thought the...I remember this, mostly, anyway! And I thought the way it was written it was obviously a dream, and the morning she wakes up to is not just any morning, its a very auspicious one for her. <br /><br />But yeah, the new opening gets to the meat of the story quicker.<br /><br />Thanks for baring your rule-breaking!Tere Kirklandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13562750950130316280noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-30610944927996406782010-06-18T09:29:51.557-06:002010-06-18T09:29:51.557-06:00I liked it and some rules are meant to be broken. ...I liked it and some rules are meant to be broken. Realistically, we don't have to follow every single one: it depends on style and story!Sangu Mandannahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09464061265952789628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-7920033543468616912010-06-18T08:38:29.787-06:002010-06-18T08:38:29.787-06:00i think i remember this?? although it's good, ...i think i remember this?? although it's good, i like your new opening better (even though my stomach doesn't). it draws me into the story faster.Michelle Gregoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-68830629656895377112010-06-18T08:13:32.056-06:002010-06-18T08:13:32.056-06:00I have to agree with the other comments--rules are...I have to agree with the other comments--rules are meant to be broken, right? <br /><br />Thanks for sharing!!!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-87554773097375721082010-06-18T08:00:40.784-06:002010-06-18T08:00:40.784-06:00Abby - I like it. I agree with Kristie, too. If th...Abby - I like it. I agree with Kristie, too. If the dream is relevant then it can be well done. But as for breaking the rules, here this beginning shows great promise and I love your style!<br /><br />This was a fun blogfest!<br /><br /><a href="http://princesscourtneysbarr.blogspot.com" rel="nofollow">Visit My Kingdom Anytime</a>Courtney Barr - The Southern Princesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14455508477182984039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-89763968507029556712010-06-18T06:53:44.089-06:002010-06-18T06:53:44.089-06:00Yep, I liked it, too. I think the no-dream rule is...Yep, I liked it, too. I think the no-dream rule is because people feel disappointed when the character wakes up - that none of it really happened. But if the dream has some significance - or the character only <i>thinks</i> it was a dream -and if it's done well, I think this rule could be broken. I think you might have been able to pull it off, with that bit about the blood on her palm. Of course, if your beginning no longer works for your story, you have a good reason for cutting it. Nice writing!Kristie Cookhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01649966564896771373noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6470708183254646866.post-15014866672991300582010-06-18T06:05:21.014-06:002010-06-18T06:05:21.014-06:00It's well-written, Abby. I liked it, rules or...It's well-written, Abby. I liked it, rules or no!Nighfalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01745824744507928211noreply@blogger.com