Friday, September 2, 2011

Blog Chain: It's Writing Time!

It's blog chain time again already! This round started just yesterday with Christine.
Since we are all writers, I thought it was about time for us to stretch our creative muscles and do a little writing. So, take the following topic and go crazy! Show us what you've got. Your story can be as long or as short as you choose. 
 The topic: A dark and stormy night.
This is a possible scene from my currently on the back burner WIP, Descent. I say possible because most of it is still in my head and the plot is unclear at this point. I know it's rough. I just whipped it out this afternoon, so I apologize in advance if it's awful. I can never be objective about something I've just written.
I winced as a branch slid off Ethan and snapped me in the face. Again.
“Almost there,” he said for the thousandth time. Apparently, he only thought he knew where we were going. “Sorry it’s taking so long, Brynn. I’ve never hiked it in the dark.”
Another apology. He should change his name to Repeat. I took a deep breath. My crappy situation wasn’t his fault. Unfortunately for him, he just happened to be in the line of fire. And he was being way too nice about it.
“It’s okay,” I said, forcing a tight smile. “You’re sure Luke’s there? Because if he’s not…” Out of money and things to sell, this was my last chance. If Luke wasn’t there, I couldn’t afford to get home. Not that there was any reason to go back without him.
“He’s there.” Ethan put his arm around my shoulders—like he’d known me more than four hours—and gave me a half-hug. “Maybe seeing you will help him remember something.”
“Maybe.” I slipped out from under his arm and trudged ahead. If Luke really had memory loss, that would explain why he never came home, but it still stung that he could forget me so easily.
“So…” Ethan said, stumbling behind me. Good thing we didn’t need to be quiet. “Are you like Luke?”
“What do you mean, like Luke?”
“Uh, you know…”
I did know, but I didn’t want to talk about with him.
He cleared his throat. “Can you fly?”
“No.” We all had unique abilities, but that was none of Ethan’s business. If Luke wanted to tell random strangers he could fly, that was his choice.
The path ended abruptly, opening into a clearing in front of a small, wooden building. It was completely dark except for one narrow window illuminated by a dim, flickering light. I peered through the glass, my whole body trembling, and there he was, staring into the fire.
Luke was alive. A weight I hadn’t noticed slipped from my shoulders.
“You wanna…?” Ethan stopped behind me as a cute brunette walked into the room. “What’s Daisy doing here?”
Daisy? She wrapped her arms around Luke’s waist. He didn’t hesitate before he returned the embrace and kissed her on the forehead.
I barely noticed the biting wind that picked up, swirling around Ethan and me. A distant thought told me this was something I should be concerned about, but all I could see was Luke with that girl. He glanced up at the ceiling as freezing rain began to drum the metal roof. It quickly turned into a downpour, drenching me in seconds.
Ethan tugged on my arm, saying something about going inside, but I didn’t really hear him. I just stared, unable to move, as Luke pulled Daisy closer. How could he forget me so completely? Thunder rumbled in the distance. She slipped her hands into his dark hair and pulled his lips to hers.
Lightning struck a tree to my right. Then the tiny porch. That got their attention. And mine.
“Crap,” I mumbled.
“What the hell?” Ethan backed away from me, pointing at the tiny arcs of electricity crackling over my fingers. “You are like him.”
Thanks for reading!
Want to participate? Feel free to take the topic and post your own story on your blog. Be sure to leave me a link so I can check it out. 
Don't miss Amparo's post tomorrow. :) 
Have a great weekend, everyone! 

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  1. Very nice! I want to read more about this. Nothing like a good love triangle to spark the imagination.

  2. Hi Abby!
    This is my first time on the blog chain. Interesting topic and I'm wondering what to come up with for my post on the 10th. *bites nails* I like the tension in your snippet here. I noticed a few adverbs you can cut back on, but other than that, you've done a really nice job, especially considering it's a first draft. :D

  3. oooo I loved it! Definitely want to read more :D Argh, so far the posts on this topic are making me very hesitant in wanting to post my own LOL

  4. I love the line about changing his name to Repeat. This is not a woman you should mess with!

  5. Unlike the other chainers ahead of me, I am super excited for my post! :P

    Well done, Abby. I think it's great that you were able to kill two bird with one stone and fulfill the chain, while posting some of your wip. Thanks!

  6. Nice scene! I loved seeing how you chose to cover the topic.

  7. First off, don't apologize. We're all doing off-the-cuff writing, so it's okay to have it not be perfect. Having said that, this is really great anyway. I admire all of you who launch right into your characters. That's an area I still find difficult (writing great characterization). Anyway, great post!

  8. Hoo boy, I like where this is going already. The mc seems like a force to be reckoned with.

    Can't wait to read more!

  9. Oh, this is good!! The tension is all over the place, between Ethan and Brynn, between Brynn and Luke, and then there's the mystery about where they got their powers and what they do with them.

    I'm happy to hear this is part of a work in progress because I'd love to read more!

  10. Oh, that's cool! Nice betrayal going on here! The book my agent has on sub has a girl who manipulates electricity, so it's fun to see another take on it.